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My Pretty Necklace

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I found a pretty necklace, hanging from a tree. 
A little voice inside, says it was meant for me. 
I try it on for size, but it feels a little loose. 
Perhaps a little tighter, now I'm hanging from my noose.
This is from awhile ago, I was in a dark mood...
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Sleyf's avatar
Wow this is very dark but I kind of love the sing-song quality behind it and the way it also has that classic "jolly morbid" tone, my only tiny suggestion would be to try to reword the second line (I'm no expert with rhymes or poetry myself) but it throws off the rhythm a tad - I think it's the "that", maybe try removing it?